I agree😊🤝

And you're welcome. Your poem was a pleasure to experience so at least the vulnerability gave birth to magic 🤭

That is so nice of you to say, it is horrifyingly exposing to share shit on the internet as it turns out. So thank you for your comment. And we all fall in love for so many different reasons. Some might seem kinda fucked up but if the end result is love, then maybe it can't be all that bad

Yo this is brilliant actually!

I can personally relate to falling for someone because of the stability they represented at the time.

I'd justify it thinking since I gave them genuine affection, it was okay. I'm still not entirely convinced it's not, but your incredible poem has awakened the wonder within me. Thank you.


>I fell not for him

>But for who he had the potential to be

>It was a lie

>I never saw you

>I saw only me

>I saw what I could be


This part was the most hard-hitting for me for sure.
It rings, quite sorely, true🙂


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Wow, never tired of reading it again and again. Everytime I read, I grew closer and closer to the character. Beautifully conveyed. So I understand that the the speaker(I imagined a she) loved him to be him and appreciate the things he didn't. Sad that things didn't work out.

This is one of the first times I've had someone read my poems, it's incredibly fucking cool hearing it is relatable. What parts of your life does it relate to? If you don't mind me asking, it's just illuminating to hear how people interpret things because the meaning seems so black and white and specific to me

I like this one a lot, It speaks to specific parts of my life and is very relatable.

Comma's and I do not have a good relationship haha. Thank you for your input, it was the first time I loved someone who can from such an idolized American home. How he took it all for granted and was almost disgusted by it - made me realize he would look at me the same way eventually. I love this idea of fantasizing about stability, because everyone with it is probably fantasizing about escaping it's confines.

Ooooof this one hits close to home for me. A portrait of my last failed relationship, heh. Kind of funny how, in retrospect, you’re able to see these things clearly… how we sometimes cling to fantasies in moments, but are wholly unable to recognize them as fantasies until time has given us a measure of objectivity. As someone who found their origins in a chaotic home environment, I fantasize about the sort of stability you depict here, have put it on a pedestal, and often feel as though my lovers, who generally originate from in tact families, are some sort of salvation for me. 

& you do a good job at depicting that kind of abstract stability kids from shitty homes yearn for. Two labradors and a pool. Concrete, and, in reality, far from a real measure of how stable a house really is, but we all have our little imaginings of what exactly comprises these environments. 

My critique would be to add more punctuation. Some commas could go a long way. 

But overall, I love it. Thanks for sh

Love this!! I love how matter-of-fact the last few lines are. The resolute way you are reflecting on this miscommunication, looking back on a person who seems like they didn’t appreciate everything they had, which I’m sure includes you!! Awesome stuff!

This is amazing! I feel this and have had similar feelings when dating “white picket fence” partners. The “bite” at the end really seals it.

After I left you

I told myself 

That which every lover

No longer in love

Tells themselves

I fell not for him

But for who he had the potential to be

It was a lie

I never saw you

I saw only me

I saw what I could be

If I had your eternally maternal mother

Your sober father

Two labradors, and a pool 

and of course, 

a home steadier than the earth beneath it.

You hated those dogs.

&amp;#x200B;

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IF I HAD YOUR MOTHER