Untitled: about dogs and rumination

I like how it seems like you're trying to convey this feeling of over thinking something to point that it creates inaction and rumination. I think you did a great job of getting that across. I like how you emphasized some of the things that an anxious watch dog might do. I like the line "barking at all that shifts and moves" It's almost like these dogs (which I assume are supposed to represent your anxiety/thoughts) are on the look out for danger and they're trying to alert you any possible threat that might come up. Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Good job!

I love this highly relatable poem. And I love the metaphor I see in my mind's eye of a hyperactive, out of control dog chasing its tail and barking uncontrollably at everything around it. I think we can all relate to periods of time when we are overwhelmed by our thoughts/angst/pain/disappointment/fear/betrayal that we engage in a destructive endless loop of negative thoughts that feed upon themselves and make us incapable of doing anything productive while at the same time leading us to want to explode in all directions, all at once, in a desperate search for relief. Well done!

This piece conveys the feeling of ruminating so well. I have had a dog like this in my head lately too. He just runs around and around.. tearing up the grass. The thought can be just like the dog too, it can bark and bark at all the reasonable thoughts trying to get it to stop, but it just keeps going because it doesn't understand. It wasn't taught that way. It is scared of what it doesn't know to be true. These thoughts are caught in the vicious cycle.. they've been there so long they are the only thing that COULD be true. This is how I interpret this poem and it really made me feel something. Thank you for sharing OP.

I never thought of this. Dogs are loved by everyone. They elicit oxytocin. We cherish them like children, but nobody wants to be called a dog or be compared to one. Bunnies bears are ok. Love bunny. Teddy bear. But not love puppy. Maybe the word bitch is lurking behind it.

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my thoughts are that a) this is lovely and b) i would scrap the first line. i feel like you made that point very clear in the rest of the poem— let the reader have some room to understand your imagery/metaphor without flat out explaining what it means in the beginning.