[2125] The Knight of Earth, Ch.1, Pt.2

Hey everyone, I’m back with part 2 of chapter 1 of this story.

I wanted to thank everyone for their document comments and critiques on part 1. I read through all of them, and people picked up on a lot of things that I didn’t, which I was really hoping for. I’ve tried to internalize the feedback as I continue writing the manuscript. At some point I would like to go back and do a full review and potential re-write of this chapter, but like others suggested I will wait until I finish Draft 1 of the story.

Chapter 1: The Ruins, Part 2

Content warnings: >!themes of suicide!<

Again, all feedback, no matter how critical, is greatly appreciated.

Here is the link to Ch.1, part 1: link

Recent critique: [3866] Forged for War, Meant for More, Ch.1 (Rev1)