[1629] The Girl and the Witch

Hello! Thank you for reading my work!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pl7K1-yBNTdO6RDh1dcy63-nYeBrxYbxhtlU9r9XF_0/edit?usp=sharing

This is the second chapter of my fairytale/fantasy novel. I am very concerned about the dialogue at the beginning of the chapter. As well as the usual things. I am curious to see what you might find to pick at in your critique.

Critique: 2006