Haha I didn’t mean to make someone feel badly, but I’m glad my poem had a strong emotional impact. Remember, everyone makes mistakes! The mistake in the poem was…bad. But you can always find a way fix things or move on. Or do something.

it feels like i'm sinking and cant do anything to stop it. i imagine myself making a choice that i regret horribly and see in a flashback all the warnings along the way but still choose to ignore them. I get this gut wrenching feeling that I've totally messed up while reading this poem. Thanks for sharing!

Thanks for the feedback! I really like your interpretation of the poem and I’m glad the emotions came through! I get the confusion of the two faces, and while I know who those are, I think that I’ll leave that up to an interpretation because they might take a different form for other people.

The ending felt like an irreversible mistake and severe regret. Good job conveying how the person felt, it felt as though they were being pushed to do something and make a choice which they ultimately regretted yet it wa too late.  I was a little confused by the two faces following but maybe that is up to us to decipher.


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It’s only my feeling toward what you wrote, keep it the way you want it to and be proud of your self it’s a great poem

Thanks for the suggestion! I’m not sure I’ll change this one, because I might’ve simply misnamed it in a way, it’s sorta a thing for me not necessarily for others, I was just hoping someone else would relate and find meaning in it. Regardless, I re-read the poem and love the suggestion, and will keep this on my feedback notes for the future :D

Give me the feeling of drowning, not only over flooded. To achieve this you must play a bit with punctuation, in this case having a minimal use of it would give us the perfect feeling until you do your punch at like the two or three last lines you could use coma

I stand at The Edge, 

afraid to jump.

I didn’t used to be afraid.

Now, after everything, I am.

&amp;#x200B;

I look back, and see.

A hundred, more, faces. 

All in my head.

&amp;#x200B;

I look back, I spot,

with my eyes,

two faces. 

They tell me to jump.

I do.

They follow.

&amp;#x200B;

I feel **cold**.

I want to swim.

Up, down.

But I am frozen, sinking.

I won’t reach the empty in time.

&amp;#x200B;

I think, then.

So many faces.

Voices.

People.

So many mistakes.

&amp;#x200B;

*This is a mistake.*

&amp;#x200B;

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Drowning