[2956] The Leech - Ch. 2

Chapter 2

Wasn't going to post because unless you've read Ch. 1, some of this will not make any damn sense. Especially the last scene. But a few people expressed interest in seeing where it's going, and there are two specific points I'd appreciate feedback on:

1. How do you feel about Cillian's competence and characterization? Going for an antihero, split-motivations type character to start. He's a leader of a group, so he can't be too incompetent/childish. He's also been through some shit, so his priorities are a bit fucked.

2. Fight scene impression/advice. I haven't written many so I feel less comfortable here.

And then also if you did happen to read Ch. 1 and this still makes no damn sense, obviously that's not great and I'd love to know.

For basic comprehension purposes if you haven't read Ch. 1:

art - magical ability unique to each human

crossleaf - an opium-like drug

Northsider - person who lives on the north side of the city (usually wealthy, educated)

the Swing - the river that cuts the city into north/south

I figure if nothing else, people can get a decent crit bank out of it.

Crits:

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