The line with the Schrodinger s cat is a personal reference to a inside joke me and that person have hence I found it appropriate to add it in. And thank you for your feedback it really helps! Thank you

I really like how you managed to capture that feeling of awkwardness and hesitance, with lines like

>I have tried to hold your gaze a second longer  
>  
>Staring at you when you look away

It really makes me feel that I'm in that moment in time which has slowed down, expressing how you feel when you're with that person, it feels really intimate and nervous.

There are a couple lines that personally don't work for me, such as

>Like the law of Schrödinger's cat

I just feel that with the feelings that I get from this poem this line just doesn't flow well, the poem is very romantic and intimate and to throw such an abrupt reference makes it feel a little less personal,

or

>Can I tell you a secret though??  
>  
>It's known but I might be in love with you

Now if the what you are trying to imply with this line is that you are actually confessing to this person then keep it, maybe only do one "?' 2 of them makes it seem more casual rather than intimate, but if it isn't a confession the

It is a sweet poem, but your word choice is rather direct. For example, "opening my mouth" might be a fine sentence, but as a verse it lacks staying power. Something like "muster the words" provides the same meaning with a more ellaborate flourishing. I'd go over the poem trying to diversify the semantic usage of words.

The "staring at you when you look away" took me out because that's the exact same thing I do every day. 

Feeling this poem on a personal level, and though you might sometimes feel alone, remember that some of us are going through the same. It's painful as hell and it doesn't numb the pain, but at least someone understands.

Loved your poem. Here's to hoping it changes someday.

Heyy the Schrodinger a cat is a personal reference to an inside joke I have with the person I have written about hence I found it appropriate to add it in. Thank you for the feedback I genuinely
 appreciate it

I love the rhythm of this poem, it flows like water yet somehow feels constrained. 

Not in a bad way but in that each line feels like it’s just about to reach a destination before continuing to the next thought except for the rhetorical question near the end.

I don’t know if that was the intention but it does great showing the feeling of feelings just below the surface but never quite let out.

The only other thing I think needs to be mentioned is some of the lines feel a little out of place, mostly the Schrödinger’s cat mention and cloud nine, though I’d guess that’s more an aspect of poet character.

By poetic character I mean it as showing a poem is written by a person with word choice, slang, specific reference, etc, essentially personality. 

Though it’s notable I don’t mean this takes from the poem; instead it makes the poem more impactful to people with similar personality and interests and more personal for you, as opposed to broad (though generally somewhat less personal) co

I love how relatable this is. It reminds me of middle school all over again. Good work

Your poem is beautiful and frankly relatable which is why I-connected with it so much. You should tell them how you feel if you don’t me giving you some advice. It very well could be the best thing you ever do!

I really love the shrodinger reference. Also I love the honesty of this, well done.

this poem is super relatable i feel like this all the great job :))

Such an innocent and relatable poem that perfectly captures the eagerness and wholesomeness of having a crush, on the crossroads of being loved or being crushed. 

If this is personal, good luck. 

10/10.

>Everything cliche seems to make sense  
  
When you are in love with your best friend

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Things are cliché because they have some basis in fact, no? This piece is so relatable and provides us with many footholds for our own unfulfilled dreams.

I feel your poem is a sonnet because it’s about love. This poem reminds of the question if I tell this friend I have strong feelings, will this friend feel same the way or just want to continue to be friends or walk away entirely? In my opinion the best way to know for sure is to find out. Otherwise you’re torturing yourself inside and what if you’re friend finds someone before you obtain the courage to say how you truly feel?

U just capture a whole of relatable feelings in your words. Nice work


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In love with my best friend 

Each time I look at you I am uncertain

If I am in terrible agony or on cloud nine

Maybe I exist somewhere in the middle 

Like the law of Schrödinger's cat 

It's like writing a letter in fine bold font 

But never having the courage to send it 

Everyday there is one moment 

When I think I can open my mouth and tell you 

But I can't find the words to say nor the guts

Can I tell you a secret though?? 

It's known but I might be in love with you 

I have tried to hold your gaze a second longer

Staring at you when you look away 

Everything cliche seems to make sense 

When you are in love with your best friend



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