I sincerely empathize with this poem right now . Short but beautifully sweet . Amazing work.

So relatable! 
Ruminating has the tendency to make what's meant to be your 'quiet space' feel like the loudest room in the house. 
Thinking what if's and playing different scenarios with different outcomes. 
Thankyou for making me feel that I don't suffer alone with this 😌


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It is great piece of work ...I've been through such thing myself and i can feel this ..nice work! Only if you could add something more to this it'll turn out to be great 🙂

I noticed no one actually came to give feedback, so here I am

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rumination  
/ruːmɪˈneɪʃ(ə)n/  
noun  
1.  
a deep or considered thought about something.  


Your poem is a loop, where in offering of brief solace when the pain is gone, your mind has once again energy to think about what hurt it. How it's then spiraling back down the rabbit hole, keeping you awake in a living nightmare. 

I would have prefered more to the third stanza, instead of just 'swirling'. Perhaps explaining what exactly is swirling inside the mind, rather than just saying -it is- doing so.   
ie: "drowning in the memories of your smile" (to compliment the mention of 'currents' in the previous stanza. 

"Haunted by dreams of what could have been" we could keep with the water theme and rework this too. "mirages of dreams that had long since sinked"   
Someone who was head over heels in love, now only left with the ashes of memories? 

love is a powerful word to use in poems that could easily be brou

Totally captured that feeling of hopelessness when a love so beautiful and free is lost. “Tortured endlessly at night.” Yeah, loss of sleep is a killer, and then going straight to dreams, you nail it. You want to sleep because you’re emotionally exhausted, you can barely sleep and when you do that memory of the beauty and brightness of your love burns into you like a hot brand on your soul. The pain stings so much that you resolve to never love again, because you never want to chance this pain again. I love this. Short, simple, and yet deep with emotion. Sometimes you don’t need fancy words or phrases to perfectly capture an idea. You just need to say the plain truth. Keep telling the truth, friend. You’ve got a talent. 🖤

Each time a peak of pain has passed

I am drawn back into the currents of my mind

Swirling

Tortured endlessly at night

Haunted by dreams of what could have been

Never had I loved before

Never will I love again

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Rumination