i would love some feedback on this one

It stings my heart

seeing your leaves becoming limp

and it's green

can no longer be seen

your once proud bud

now pathetically bow

one petal fall after another

yet you refused to leave her garden

when you can bloom in mine.

Even though your thorns will make me bleed

to be embraced by you is my greatest wish

if only we are of different kind

perhaps our love will be entwined.

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