Rhyme isn't everything with poetry. That's why I love it.

Thanks for the suggestion, I thought it was a bit too much as well, but I was having some trouble with the rhyme. I'll try and figure something out.

I think this is a powerful love poem. My only critique would be word choice (eg gestion). Maybe make it more layman friendly.

What I like about this poem is that it's a common theme everyone can relate too, a simple topic; the question. That one question, you translated not only your own individual experience, but the experiences of others, through what you went through. You are able to connect with the reader quickly, with such a simple premise, like I said; the question.


I don't know if that makes sense. Your poem is brilliant.


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This poem is such a short piece of anguish. It feels like the poem is a part of your flesh cut of off your body. A great one!

I love this. The dichotomy of love and guilt is really beautiful. It’s short but manages to convey emotions really well. One critique i have is the insistence of rhymes.  
“…question” “….gestion” 
“…her” “…anchor” 
I think it would be more raw and authentic if you were to not worry so much about wether or not it rhymed.

Here’s my feedback:

All a poem needs in order to be great is to be raw emotion. And this feels raw af. Thats what i like anyway. I dig it. Please keep going.

It's a nice idea but feels flat, there's not much of a rhythm and it's not very smooth. Word choice and condensing the lines might help

I asked her the question

She loved someone else 


I knew I must gestion

But my pain did not lessen 


And yet how could I ask her 

To leave her anchor

If she loved them as I loved her 


How could I

When it hurt to lose her so





[This is my first poem like ever after a lifetime of convincing myself I hated it so any feedback would be greatly appreciated]

Edit: Formatting 

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