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lemrind

Is it reality I can’t hear

Poem

I didn’t hear what you said

Your words didn’t come through

Because I thought you’d be forever

Cause I thought you’d be awake

I perceived you like somebody

Just somebody in a sea of many

Even though you were precious

Still you were just any other

But I wonder why and how

I feel like hearing loud and clear

When I think you’re not long

When I think you’re just drifting

You aren’t telling me anything

No, not anymore

It doesn’t feel real today

Cause you’ve left today for never

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Posted Jul 1, 2022, 5:15 AM UTC

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seaviper7•

This resonated with me so deeply. I loved the way you compared somebody's presence to being able to hear them, and how genuine some of the verses came off across as. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Thank you for sharing!

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This poem to me has such a great detailed way to describe how a person can take a loved one for granted. Whether it be because you couldn't even imagine them not in your life or whether it's just because you didn't even think about it. The twist at the end using "never" instead of forever was pretty clever, but the ending perhaps could have used one more line to tie it together; to tie it back to some of the ways you described this person in my opinion. Fun read though.

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