[1737] Epic Fantasy multiple POV opening chapter

Hey everyone!

A couple of days ago, I submitted a "first chapter" of sorts for critique. After receiving a lot of good feedback, I have revamped the POV chapter for one of my characters. This may not be the first chapter in the book, but it's the first chapter for this POV. Below is the link.

Some of the things I would appreciate feedback on/might provide context.

1. Prose. I really am trying to refine the craft of writing and any feedback on this is super helpful.
2. Character voice. I know it's a fairly short piece, but I have a lot of POVs and want fairly distinct characters.
3. I'm not looking for a super creative outside of the box (Branden Sanderson) type of feel. I love euro-medieval influenced fantasy, and while my story has different cultures from a variety of settings, I do have knights and swords and european-style countries in this epic. Take that into consideration.
4. Magic system: Elemental based. Earth, air, fire, water, wood, metal, and an "ether". This isn't really explained in this POV, but bits of that are implied/foreshadowed. Again, this isn't necessarily something I think is incredibly new or different, but it's what I enjoy writing and I think I have added enough of a twist to it throughout the book so it's not some sort of Avatar Airbender situation going on. :)

Thank you everyone for taking the time to read and critique. Here's the link to my google doc

Qaeran's first POV chapter

My Critiques:

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