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steph_dreams

a prelude to dreaming

Poem

The horizon plucks the clouds like pink grapes from a vine—

like sheep’s wool she swaddles herself in,

just to hold tight in this flush summer night.

laid down to rest, a heat settles into her pores as she sinks into the clouds,

a heat ignites her face and blows a gust across the skies,

a heat sends shivers that escape as a yawn,

a heat passes by like a ship in the night.

Breathing— deeply, her eyes open up to drink the pooling dark, and again,

she sucks in the whole world till she’s peering at it through nothing but a hole in the sky…

horizon closes her eyes, breathes out, and lips stained pink fall into a smile.

pink clouds now such a deep blue

they fade into black

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♡

♡

Posted Jul 7, 2022, 7:51 PM UTC

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Outrageous-Chard-703•

“Pink clouds now such a deep blue They fade into black” Such a beautiful description and a dark looming way to complete this poem. I really enjoyed giving this one a read.

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romanticizetocope•

that's really intriguing, and i love the pictures you painted.. can't say i completely understand it but i really like the sudden ending too, nice rythm

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steph_dreamsOP•

it’s about how it feels to go to sleep! I like writing poems about random feelings lol

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hawaiianeskimo•

I love the personification of the horizon, and love the break from heat with “Breathing-deeply, her eyes…” it makes you pause regardless. I’m not sure the “ship in the night” fits, as that would be as though the heat was never felt, but I may just not understand. Great imagery!

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