[1071] A Brief Respite

This was a sort of flash fiction (?) I wrote a while back in response to a writing prompt on reddit. I feel like I might need some help on the grammar I'm not sure if I'm using commas right or if the way my sentences are structured are right.

I like to write short glimpses of different worlds from the perspectives of theyre inhabitants.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_949wY8sZQdSocr6PaTs764GIdMNjWKfR1ibXz0dcAI/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks!

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