[1834] The Mall (dystopian near-future)

Hi,

I'm working on a dystopian near-future stand-alone story, feedback would be most appreciated!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OzlnRtK6sGKw8oolNJ2ESxUFz-PzdqsF/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=108272648249610433566&rtpof=true&sd=true

Crits:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/vya69n/1450_unmade_alternative_historysuperhero/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/vxhscn/639_western_flash_fiction/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3