Together we watch the full Honey moon
Basking in the yellow glow
A golden kiss
Sugar softens my lips
Syrupy sweet
Hooked on the taste
The taste of New
But New fades
Sugar crusts around my lips
Sticks them shut
I can't tell you how bored I am
The bright Honey moon has waned
The pot has run dry
Flies gather around rancid traces
Of once sweet honey
They, like you, seem to be the only ones who enjoy the taste
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Posted Jul 26, 2022, 2:04 PM UTC
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It's about honey sweet moments with she, but something went wrong and honey moon faded under the clouds. That how I saw this poem. I want to admit a good allegory, how you bond moonlight with love and flies with a bunch of newborn boyfriends. Good job dude!