Hii! Thanks a lot for your kind words! :)
Uhm... well, yeah you're right! I added a melody too, uh...this isn't the full version tho. I thought it was kinda stretched for no reason. I really don't know how to write poetry. I was looking for other subreddit but found r/OCPoetry. This subreddit is awesome honestly. 

I guess poetry is too difficult for me cause we have to be careful with choice and words and the way of putting a point. Also how to express the feelings in a short composition. I'm not that creative in my opinion. But yeah, I try.

I just focus in rhymes. That's one of the things I should work on. Ah, sorry, guess I went off topic xD.  Thank you again. Glad you like it :)

hey :)  
this gives a sort of song vibe, have you tried adding a melody? its pretty deep, it really speaks to the reader with the style of writing. the simple but powerful diction gives the point quite well. I really like it!

Glad you liked it! And thank you so much! I appreciate that :)

That last line, “‘You’ is ‘I’ and you know that” is quite beautifully, and simply, put. Throughout it feels like a “it gets better” kind of vibe, but that last line brings it all in to a feeling of “I’m still in this too”. I like it a lot.

Wow! Thank you so much!! :)

Ah, it's calm and slow one. Actually I'm just too introvert too share the full version. And I'm not a good singer either. Just try sometimes. But I'm so amazed to see that people can tell if it's a song or what. Haha

Thanks a lot again for giving motivation to write more!

I really like this poem that I decided to write my very first comment on it, I felt like it even spoke to me in way so pretty relatable! And gosh I've always loved simplicity in poems since it seems to convey a deeper meaning which anyone can understand or analyze however they want.
Also it does actually give off song vibes, I'd love to hear how it sounds like with a melody... I'm wondering if it would be an upbeat song or a calm consoling one instead?
By the way I loved the last line, keep up the good work!

Oh my Goodness!!! Can't believe. This was the best compliment I could ever receive. Thank you soooo much! You made my day a million times better. Didn't know this will be loved by someone else too. I appreciate it. Thanks again for such a kind comment :)

Omg can I say this was the best poem I read so far on reddit. Omg how beautiful the ending was and the way a melody is striking at the back of my mind and making me to read it like a song is so amazing. The plot is good and so are you.    I took a screeshot btw I'm not gonna repost but I loved ot fosho


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When it seems like you lost

When it feels right to stop

And you quit trying, but don't 

(give up) 
     
Think twice, you won't

(give up) 

/

When you're stucked, can't climb up

When you're not done, but times up

And you're not proud and nobody cares 

When you look around, nobody's there

/

When it seems like a misstep 

When it feels right to sit back

You feel tired and depressed 

You just need time to think back

/

When you talk to yourself in notepads 

You write a poem for yourself 

You try to smile but it's so sad

Well, "you" is "I" and you know that



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