Give us this day

Our daily jab,

And forgive us our blood sugar

As we consume waste, pleased with the taste.

Lead us not into well-being,

But deliver us from consequences.


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Some of the best poetry and lyrics are a literal statement about a certain thing or a metaphor of that thing. In this short and simple poem you have highlighted a truth and achieved both aspects of the art.

Great work! Short and simple..the theme is relevant, and the comparison is not all together unfair. 

I would loved to have read more ? of the prayer I guess, but I see another user has completed (?) your poem.

The style reminds of urdu poetry which is called "shaayari"

Pretty creative and relevant, I plan on revisiting this one.

Our Pharma, who art in lobby,

hallowed be thy swamp.

Your growth be done, your profits come

de facto *or else* de jure.

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