[2513] Relevance

A recent widower has a drinking problem but wrestles out of it. However, soon he must confront his past as someone isn't happy about his change.It's safe to read, no sex, but some violence and rude language.

In my last story on here, the main complaints were predictability of the plot, shallow characters and poor continuity of the story segments. I'm in process of editing it, but in the meanwhile, I wrote this, Relevance, where I'm trying to be less predictable, shallow, and jarring. I'd like your comments on that, please.

Furthermore, I know I break grammar rules. I write as I hear it, if I'd stick to grammar, it wouldn't sound like I want it to. That being said, I'd appreciate your comment if it is readable. Does it make sense? Do the words roll nicely? What places are jarring?

Finally, I was trying to write to a theme, do you think the theme is well explored? Keep in mind it's a story, not an essay. I blackened the theme in case you first want to read the story.>!We all want to stay relevant amidst the change!<

Of course, any other comments are appreciated.

Cheers.

Story:https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XCknOVGCVeswrw-PDUwHRaD-nMkzpZUp-mqwQrGA5OI/edit?usp=drivesdk

Mods:https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/vz31p1/2585_a_phantom_signal_part_2/

+ I'm sorry, it is 2517 words. Typo, I can't change the title. Still within the word count.