An Ode to Fellatio (Sonnet #1)

This made me laugh quite a bit; it is funny but well written. Good job!😂

I think this poem was so enjoyable and hilarious. You seemed totally serious in tone but the whimsy of wording created a playful atmosphere between reader and writer. What a joy to read because I literally laughed all the way through. Admirably, I feel it's a complete story, you had intentional formatting, and showed your technical application of rhyme and rhythm in your own way. Super awesome indeed! Thanks for sharing 👍

Nicely composed! Love the line length and you seem to have chosen all the best words at the right time! (Thanks for the giggles, you’ve brightened my day.)

A beautifully shameless exploration of oral sex, blunty worded for comic effect -- I love it :)

Strong stuff. Explosive imagery. A very satisfying read. Now I'm no sonnet expert, my one attempt was very awkward so take my feedback with a grain of salt.

Your meter is pretty much on point, apart from a couple of lines

"After having fondled and tongued a scrote" has this interesting substitution with FONdled and TONGued a SCROTE. I think it's called a pyrrhic substitution? Either way, it's a thing, but this line feels a bit clanky.

Your rhyme scheme was unexpected, I figured sonnets go ABAB CDCD EFEF GG but I could he wrong, I'm a basic bitch anyway and should go back to free verse myself but overall this was hilarious and i enjoyed reading it.

love! more poems need to be about head imo

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omg i actually love this poem so much??? its so funny and real and rhyming and all the fancy words for a not so fancy act is just excellent!! i have no real feedback because this is just so great!

I love it <3

lmao there's something about smutty poems that i love just cause i think it breaks peoples idea that poetry is a pretentious or "higher" art form that's different from anything else

only critique i can think of is that there are a couple syllable emphasis that are a bit off, but tbh who cares great work lol

Lol when you're writing a poem but you're horny

Really enjoyed reading this! As a gay person who is so repulsed by the act of fellatio that I avoid any content related to it like the plague, I never thought I could read a poem about it without feeling disgusted by it.

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Finally. Someone who also loves to write about sex✨loved it

Very beautiful!

Reminds me of ‘Lech Mich Im Arsch’ by Mozart (Lick Me in the Ass in English).

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