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frevaastray

The Millennials Plight

Poem

A dream that reached the future but was taken from the past

A time that’s like no other but the moments never last

Crimson flowers reinvented yet give the same effect

Spread across a nation as we we’re failing to protect

David and Nelson met their end which set the stage for war

Thousands fought and died for US but killed a million more

Burning life from eons past corrupted all we know

Nature turns her back on us when her forests are aglow

Look to the heavens up above and ancient wisdom shall be gained

Look too different in your community and you just might be hanged

Elders inspire with tales of peace and love

Seeming to forget what they were neglectful of

Music was doorway to all that which we seek

Profit closed that door with a little tongue in cheek

This may be our end because divided we always fall

But we’ll keep hope alive and answer when it calls

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Review 1 (beautiful poem)

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/wpb7jg/the_river/

Review 2 (great poem I just disagree)

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/wpi2gu/17_be_tough/

Posted Aug 16, 2022, 3:39 AM UTC

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PersimmonFit350•

I am a gen zer and feel this too, from your parents generation and you made me think about this a little different than others in my generation. thanks.

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frevaastrayOP•

Thanks, I know its a bit abstract but it's my first attempt. I'll be working on Millennials plight #2 soon.

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