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I love the bluntness of the structure. Statement after statement. What I would challenge myself to do if this were my piece would be to leave more statements that lure us to the next. Maybe this can be accomplish by moving lines around? I enjoy this a lot.

I really enjoyed this. The repeating of the first words and the rest of their statements was a bit hard to put together in the first read for me. But it allowed me to play around with different ways of reading and interpretation, which was fun. 

I also think the first words are very well chosen. They each have a very strong meaning and are essential in our lives.  

The statement that threw me off a little was “holding infinity”. It is rather abstract, while the others are less so

Very nice, a great concise structure. I like you how you work toward the final sentence, as an element of change from the rest of the poem.

Falling in love

Falling out of reality 

Finding a sanctuary 

Finding momentary bliss

Calling upon selflessness

Calling out of society 

Discovering connection

Discovering how to float

Holding infinity 

Holding each other

Forfeiting worries

Forfeiting restraint 

Creating a painting in real life

Creating a painting in a dream

Learning how to love

Learning how to coexist 

Crossing the bounds of expression 

Crossing the river of discovery

I hope you remember 

Because I do

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Do You Remember?