[1997] The Northern Auk, part 1 of 3

EDIT: Just a heads-up if you're considering critiquing this: after some thinking and thanks to the excellent feedback here, I've decided to rewrite this part and repost after the 48-hour time limit. Figured I might as well leave the post up in the meantime since I already paid for it with crits, but keep in mind that I'll be making big changes to this version. Thanks!

Hey, everyone. Lame as it is, my "main" project is going to need more structural work before I feel it makes sense to post a revised opening here. Still, I have old crits expiring, so I figured I'd try a short story in my Askulaya series to ease back into more regular writing and posting on RDR. I'm giving myself a hard limit of 6k words for this one.

So for your consideration, here's another installment of the adventures of Tilnin, a down on his luck shaman eking out a living in a small coastal town that's seen much better days. The story takes place in a fictional world shaped by climate change and peak oil.

Since last time I've been brushing up on my Chandler too, so let's see if that makes a difference...:P

As always, your feedback is much appreciated.

(Also going to shamelessly ping u/genuineroosterteeth, since you've been kind enough to show some interest in Tilnin before)

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Crits

[2265] The Rainy Day Ghost

[892] Pasteurized