[2,401] In Love with your Death, Part 3

(Note for myself, I submitted this at 2:12pm MST)

In Love with your Death is a story about true love, fear of death, self realization, and fighting inner demons, disguised as a Succubus story.

Important context: Arael is a fae spirit which has been manifested into physical form at this point in the story for around 6 months or so. Her physical body is a Succubus, created through Ash's imagination. Ash, to her, is her Soulmate, and she is on a mission to free his soul from this world so they can be together in the fae/spirit realm. Because she hasn't been in her physical body for very long, she has no real attachment to it. Ash is her number one concern. To give you an idea of how Alien her thinking is, at this point in the story she has killed several people, absorbing their sexual energy. She does this to keep herself manifested in physical form. To a normal human understanding, Arael is effectively a psychopath and a serial killer.

Part 3 is comprised of chapters 5 and 6.

STORY LINK - [Part 3]: https://docs.google.com/document/d/17smozsLTr6zYXywLjRoc1P2CMYfZAMKIipMqN26DFg0/edit?usp=drivesdk

Theme music for Chapter 5: Berserk - Murder

WARNING: Chapter 5 has very NSFW content which may be traumatic for some readers.  It involves themes of imprisonment and sexual assault.  Please proceed with caution.

I considered jumping straight to Chapter 10 for my next submission, but I decided to completely rewrite these two chapters instead.  At this point I would like to see where my own writing stands, without Dreamily.ai 

All of it will be rewritten again, I'm sure, as there is a wealth of great resources now at my fingertips to help myself improve.

In chapter 1, Arael begins seducing Ash, a coincidence interrupts them.

In chapter 2, Arael goes hunting.

In chapter 3, Arael returns.  She brings with her a mysterious load of cash (crime?) and has a moment with Ash.

In chapter 4, Arael goes to class with Ash, stirring up a load of trouble.  Arael gets into a confrontation with a girl named Talia, and things don't go well for Arael.

There are currently 15 total chapters to this story, and I will keep writing them until I feel satisfied that the story has come to a finish.

A note on Ash: I have begun rewriting Ash's personality completely.  Thanks to Dreamily.ai's database, he reeked of Fanfiction.  I am attempting to make him a more interesting, believable (second) main character.

Dreamily.ai helped me get comfortable with writing, and at this point I am leaving it behind.  Hopefully I can extract myself from any bad habits I picked up.  Still, I am grateful that it got me writing.  I am now very invested in making this story come to life.

All of the writing from chapter 5 onward is solely my own.

I hope you enjoy the read!

Oh also, if you missed the tag, this story gets VERY NSFW.

Please go gentle on me, and tear my writing to pieces, I love you all ♡

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