[1,533] Fallacious Foster Candor

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This is the second draft of the first chapter, I want to know how the dialogue sounds, how the descriptions are or are not working, and if the hook is effective as I hope. Rip and tear, I'm excited to see the comments.

(The title is a WIP)

Critiques- 1- [978] [Ronno] (https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/wu48wn/comment/ilalwd9/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3) 2- [898] Bite