[2163] The Northern Auk, part 1 of 3 (redone)

Hey, RDR. Here's a revised version of the short story opener I posted the other day. I got some lovely feedback that I've tried to take into account for this rewrite. Hopefully the result is a leaner and less meandering introduction, but as always, you'll be the judges of that.

So here's take two of this installment of the adventures of Tilnin, a down on his luck shaman eking out a living in a small coastal town that's seen much better days. The story takes place in a fictional world shaped by climate change and peak oil.

Any and all feedback is much appreciated, and thank you for reading!

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[1279] Lydia at night, part 3

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