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wideopenflame

Dear Past, Present, Future Lover

Poem

I wrote this for you

I met you before

In my dreams

And my nightmares

I miss you

I love you

I hate you

I wish you were here still again

I wish I never met you yet

Read me to life

Beat me to life

Breathe me to life

I am so much more than the sum of my parts

But they are really nice parts

They’re so enticing

They’re so distracting

Misdirection to fool you

Into forgetting I am a wild thing

Owned by no one

Despite what the collar around my throat says

Search for me

It’s all in print now anyway

1. A Last Talk With My Mind

2. An Army of Lungs

Posted Aug 30, 2022, 12:51 AM UTC

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MildDramaStarter•

First I’d like to say I like the poem a lot. The first part is very cohesive and gets the message across for past, present and future lovers quite well. In the part of ‘I wish’ I feel it gives it a very unique way of connecting the different times but maybe a coma before yet or again so when you are reading it feels like you are saying ‘I wish I never met you’ to the past lover but yet to a future one you don’t want to meet, however as it is I could interpret it as wishing you never met a past lover in the time you did and maybe it would have been better to meet them later on. I got a bit confused after ‘I am so much more…’ but I get the idea that it tells the lovers they do not own me but still I’d wait for them to find me.

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wideopenflameOP•

Thanks for the feedback. I kinda liked the ambiguity of again and yet as maybe both interpretations are true for me. It has mild bdsm overtones and references to the book I just published too. It is in fact all in print. Solidifying the point of no return for my raw, exposed truth. Which let me tell you was kind of a mind f*ck putting it all out there and the unexpected feelings I faced in aftermath.

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MyspaceQueen333•

I agree with the comment about the coma before "yet". But the rest is fire! Great poem. I felt that in my soul.

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wideopenflameOP•

Thank you. 😊

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