[2174] The Lost and the Fractured Ch. 1

Hello destructionists

First time making a post here and boy do I need some help. I've been back and forth on my opening chapter between drafts, worrying about pacing and the dreaded fantasy world info-dumps. After reading through very informative responses to clchickauthor's submission I also suspect I might be guilty of using an actiony-violent opener without substance to it. Any feedback is welcome. Make me see how my writing sucks plox.

Google link: fantasy story nr. 9 million

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