Man, I really like the melody of this! It’s really smooth, and it blends well. I also like the creativeness. The phrase “Undertree” is completely original and just really cool. Nice job!!

Thank you! Like much of my work, it came from just sitting around outside lol.

I love the rhyming! How’d this idea? come to you

A wonderful way to spend an evening, thank you!

I love this! Sometimes simplicity is the key! What a gorgeous little piece of imagery. Makes me crave to sit under a canopy of trees and bask in the last of the year's sun.

Funny, I had that saying playing around in my head when I wrote this. Glad you like it!

The line "the best things in life are free" came to me after reading this poem. I really like it, specifically how it illustrates a moment and, by extension, brevity, but even so the principles being conveyed generalize onto experience as a whole. There are many examples of the relationship dynamic seen between the sun and the tree, a fundamentally protective force, but the most ringing one is, of course, love. So, in sum, I really enjoy how your poem inclines the reader to ruminate on other protective forces, and thereby appreciate them more.

Really elegant the relationship between the sun and shadow that you trace with your whole theme! Congratulations!

Were it not for melancholy, ennui, and nature, I'd have nothing to write about lol. Thank you!

it's nice to read something wholesome, something simple not simply in rhyme or stanza but in nature. this is about the simplicity of enjoying a tree, of appreciating the nature of its protective shade, something we all forget exists and take for granted.

Very nice,  I like the use of "undertree" as a word.  Creative.  And the thought of its free gift, a beautiful perspective.  Gratitude.  Glass half full kind of view.


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This willow casts its shade on me,

It does this deed for free. 

I know not what I’d offer it, 

If it charged a fee. 

The sun is hot, 

Its rays do not, 

Hit me undertree. 

For the shade is ever always offered, 

Undertree for free.

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