[2,146] SCI-FI MECHA FIGHT SCENE

Hello, this is a science fiction dystopian piece that I've worked on on and off. My main focus here is the action: I tried my best to make it an action-orientated piece, and capture a balance between a stream of consciousness style and fight scenes. The switches in perspective is a new style that I chose to create a faster pace. Do you think it works?

Specific feedback includes but is not limited to: --was the prose engaging and did it flow nice? What did you think of the imagery?

--was the action engaging? Did it make you want to read on?

--what about the characters? Did they feel real? I know there was little shown, but with what was shown, was it enough to interest you?

Of course, I would appreciate very specific feedback on the prose, imagery and fight scenes, as they were my main focus. What can I say, I never thought writing giant robot fight scenes could be this much fun. Anyways, thank you all. Good luck with your own writing endeavours, and be sure to crush me!👍🧐🧐

Submission: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pUSN_HZakd9Vv-kAcbgGXhZhwc3RTmWSwD0fC_AAaNk/edit?usp=drivesdk

Critiques: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/w0ku8o/1953_crimson_queen_v2/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=mweb

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/x2m61g/2174_the_lost_and_the_fractured_ch_1/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=mweb