I am so happy to hear this resonated with you. More to come soon. :)

This is really emotional, and beautifully written. The uses of punctuations and the short lines was a good idea. In my opinion, emotional ones sounds better with pauses, which is the reason this poem is so wonderful and gets more and more enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing this! Keep it up :)


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In certain circumstances, a cliché can be used in a poem without it sticking out like dog's balls, but it's probably better to avoid using them altogether, or try mashing them up a bit.

Ignorance is bliss. 

This is why I wish I never knew you. 

&amp;#x200B;

I would never have missed you. 

Remembered the lips I kissed you, 

With. 

Out. 

Of the time we had, 

&amp;#x200B;

Glad. Every moment. 

Sad. When you removed it. 

&amp;#x200B;

That picture of you I kept on my desk, held close to my heart like the art I created on that same desk in your likeness. 

&amp;#x200B;

I worshipped you. 

&amp;#x200B;

Every letter an offering, every sentence a shrine. 

&amp;#x200B;

There was a time I tore out my heart to you,

Asking you to make the rain stop. 

&amp;#x200B;

But your thunder continued to roll, unchanged. 

&amp;#x200B;

Have you forsaken me?

&amp;#x200B;

&amp;#x200B;

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Forsaken