[1149] Exit

Context: Standalone piece of flash fiction. No before or after, this is the story.

The most common critical comments I get are as follows so I’ve been trying to work on these, I’d appreciate pointing out any obvious oversights in these areas.

• Showing not telling

• Being too subtle with the plot points

• Overuse of filtering when describing what my character(s) is doing

• Being a bit boring / not much happening

Story here:

Exit

Critique:

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