[3020] The Dancers (V1)

Hi everyone,

Here is a short scary story that I'm considering posting on r/nosleep. For context: I'm a new author and English is my 2nd language, so feel free to unleash your inner Grammar Nazi in addition to your Destructive Reader!

Public Google Doc: The Dancer (V1)

TW for miscarriage. Yeah, this one is a bit of a downer. However, my fellow folklore and history buffs might be interested to know that it hails from a specific episode in French history: >!the dancing plague of 1518 (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dancing\_plague\_of\_1518). !<Had you ever heard of it?

A few more questions:

• Is the story engaging and easy to read? Does the build-up work? Is the ending satisfying?
• Does the style feel childish, inexperienced to you?
• Is the MC engaging? Do you empathize with her, while still noticing her character flaws? Would you be more interested in the story if you knew or liked her more? Does the POV work here (from her recounting past incidents, to writing in present tense)? Does her psychological evolution feel realistic and fluid to you?

My critique: [3270]

Thank you for your time and expertise!