[1360] Fingers in the Dirt

Hi all. I'd appreciate any feedback on this short story. I'll take any thoughts on board, but I'm interested to know: Is the writing/dialogue strong enough to carry you through, is there enough description to fill in the blanks, is it too weird?

Story:

Fingers in the Dirt

Critiques:

[1526] The Alcuna Card

[216] Perditum Monstrum