>Collections for  
Kiss-me-nots,  
Forget-me-nots.

I love how this feels to say and the way it rolls off the tongue. 

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This is beautiful. 10/10.

Simple, Elegant, and Beautiful. Well done, friend.

At the eleventh hour, I have found an untouched poem to comment on before saturday. Thank you, stranger.

It's bothering me that the title isn't capitalized.

The first two lines are enigmatic, yet understandable after a moment of thought—the maze of the mind.

No crickets to strum is a compact, nicely-phrased line—however, the syntax implies that the speaker would be strumming these crickets like a guitar. 

the third stanza is a bit of a mess. former...what? why is it a noun? where is elsewhere? this what? we don't know this from that. It's all very vague, and could use definition.

loss and shadows...strikes me as being a slightly tired connection.

I have actually seen a kiss-me-not, once—I remember because I took a picture of it, since it was so unique. I never knew what it was called, though. Thanks for introducing me to that. It's so wonderful that there's a counterpart to the famed forget-me-not—and with such an apt, romantic name. I don't understand what you mean by collection

I loved this poem, I think you did a great job


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Pacing the old.  
Spirals of the mind.  

No crickets to strum.  

Formers haunt elsewhere,  
this power of possession.  

Loss in shadows.  

Collections for  
Kiss-me-nots,  
Forget-me-nots.  

The eat away,  
between breaths,  
in a pause.  

Hidden past a pond,  
in a field beyond  
a world’s wind whimpers.  

Stand still time,  
everything I crawl away from.  

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To be found