For those who are feeling bare
Who have wear and tear
Who find joy to be rare
Who think this is all too much to bear
I know life is unfair
For it, you cannot prepare
But to end it all, do not dare
You have stories to share
Lover's eyes to stare
Possibly an heir
So please, do not feel despair
For there is a tomorrow and you will be there
It gets better, I swear
Take care
Posted Sep 4, 2022, 6:00 PM UTC
Nice rhyming pattern. And the best thing about this piece is the simplicity. Loved it. Keep writing. :)
Thank you. Means a lot to have this positive feedback.
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Thank you for the kind words. Whenever I write, I'm all about that rhyme, because I think it adds a lot of challenge to writing to a certain theme.
I love this poem and the simple rhyming structure. It makes it so pleasing to read. I like how it’s like nursery rhyme but it’s about something so deep and sad like suicide.
Thank you. I went for this rhyming structure to make it soothing for the reader. Glad you liked it.
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I actually found this poem to be really comforting and nice as i struggle with mental illnesses myself. It's rhythm is also very pleasant
Glad that it helped. My intention behind this poem was just that. Keep on keeping on.