I had a thought similar to this earlier and had to ask myself if what I thought was nothing more than lust was truly lust at all. The thought spiraled well beyond where I expected and I wound up rereading months of texts. I didn’t get an answer from my searching but I’m holding out hope.

This poem makes me feel feelings I haven't felt yet. It makes me feel a little sad. Don't get me wrong though, I love this poem, it's a wonderful piece. It just makes me feel nostalgic for something I've never known, recalling a familiar sensation that no longer has meaning. This is an amazing poem, overall. :D

I love the simplicity of the diction because it compliments the complexity of the topic very well! Very relatable feeling to not have love returned.

this is such a well written poem!! the rhyme scheme, particularly towards the end is very clever. it portrays the aftermath of loosing someone you love and the attachment still there effectively, with lines like "willingly giving into your touch, your kisses, your hugs". great job!!

Looking for love but finding only lust is a very common experience  and the poem speaks simply to that feeling of emotional unavailability or mismatch which can limit how deep a relationship can go.  The feeling of longing and disappointment really comes through and it doesn't waste words.  The change in the rhyme scheme at the end doesn't feel unnatural.  Good.

Wonderful piece, I love how it talks about such a complex topic in such a simple way. Love it

I think relationships are tricky to navigate much like this poem states. Love and lust can be extremely close at times and it's not farfetched at all to say both feelings share a room, but there are times that we replace one with the other. This can be heartbreaking to see and feel. This poem feels like someone who's gone through a breakup and they just can't find any way to distinguish in their memories where it was lust and where it was true love, and that speaks to me as I went through a horrible breakup and found myself doing the same often.

Hi there,

Thanks for sharing this. For me, this screams of hopes unfulfilled and a love unrequited. I love reading and exploring feelings like this because it shows just how much power and impact love truly has. It always hurts for the sword to only cut one way. 

I've done a narration that I'll link on google drive. It may help provide another voice to your emotion. Exploring this pain and hurt is necessary to preserving a loving and tender heart. A heart bleeding is still alive. Never forget that.

[https://drive.google.com/file/d/1CMuT8\_-PbQd\_jpQh7FaLRqzrgZXQbCbE/view?usp=sharing](https://drive.google.com/file/d/1CMuT8_-PbQd_jpQh7FaLRqzrgZXQbCbE/view?usp=sharing)

Really gorgeous and direct . I loved the closing lines.

wow I really enjoyed this and I definitely can relate on so many levels. it takes me back in time to a certain person that i showed so much of my body with begging for me but he couldn't give me any more of him that he didn't have. it was heartbreaking to see him in a relationship soon after.

I love that line. “Memories in the dust…”

Something about that description injects my heart with guilt, shame, and even embarrassment. That was really powerful.

😭😭😭 this reminds me of my first girlfriend, about 8-9 years ago. When we broke up, i couldn’t date anyone for a good 3 years because i only thought about her. Thank god for therapy. Your poem sounds so nostalgic to me. It’s like the last line, “memories in the dust…”

Gosh this poem brings to light everything I have been feeling. Amazing job!

Distilled something which I once knew. It's very raw and relatable.


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At times I sit and wonder,

What if things were different? 

Like your heart was at close distance,

Cuz I’m wrapped around your finger,

Willingly giving into your touch,

Your kisses, your hugs,

Those unforgettable moments,

Where’d they go?

It’s like we’ve come to the end of the road,

I was looking for love,

Found nothing but lust,

 Cuz we’re foolishly distant,

Memories in the dust…

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