Thank you so much for reading. 

Art is one of those things that's interpreted differently by different people. Because of this, we can all have different viewpoints of the same piece, some positive and some negative. 

The work that you provided feedback on has a meaning. The work doesn't speak to you because you have to be open to see it from a different angle. If you look at it too literally, you will miss it. 

The title is named as such for a very specific reason. 

Just keep looking. 

Thank you again for the feedback. You took time out of your day to say something and I appreciate it.

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>How much unrequited love exists in the world?

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>I bet it’s enough to bring about world peace.



***What I see here is a question regarding the quantity of an abstract concept (unrequited love) that is, in turn, answered in response with another abstract concept. (World peace) There is an attempt at humor here which, unfortunately, doesn't ignite considering the lack of invocation or detail or anything outside vagueness. I also don't see how this relates to the title from this point.***    


>A piece of my heart, a piece of yours,

>Aren’t there enough of us [add "to"] make a bunch of filled hearts?


***Four lines in and I'm still not understanding the relationship of the title with the content. There is an attempt at metaphor here with piecing together hearts as representative of those seeking love to guide towards one another opposed to their unrequited obsessions...but, I'm still trying to understand the point of the first two

I really like the two opening lines. It starts off strong. bBut like the other commenters have said, overall it's hard to get what it's really about. But it's certainly not bad, it just feels like every few lines a line was cut. Maybe try to flesh it out a bit.

Maybe I'm being a bit too elusive so I will give a clue as to why it's called Strings. 

The love referred in the poem is one with strings attached. It was never unconditional and the narrator was abandoned in the end and (s)he was strung along throughout the relationship. 

Expectations. Love unfulfilled. 

How many of us hurt? How many of us are one sidedly loving someone? 

Anyway, I hope this helps. Sorry to all for the vagueness.

The first two lines are great in my opinion. There is a feeling on undying hope there. I'd have to agree with the previous comment though, the rest of the poem lost me completely and while it is true, art is open to interpretation and we may have a huge blind spot in trying to attach a connection between poem and title, I simply do not see the correlation. This may just be a case of the reader not being able to fully relate to your words, as only you truly know what you mean.

I like this one, especially the last line. It makes me feel sad for the person. There are some gems in this like when you say "aren't there enough to make a bunch of filled hearts?" And the "Left me. Standing."  is really effective. But "we feel their hearts, but they don't fill us back" seems awkward to me. Maybe word that differently. Also you could add scenery to give it more substance, like standing in the rain or something. I don't know, just a suggestion. Overall I really enjoyed it and found it relatable.

I really likes this, the single words was the point where it was single words, was like single painful steps where it becomes hard to breathe. Questioning why you are on the receiving end


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How much unrequited love exists in the world?

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I bet it’s enough to bring about world peace.

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A piece of my heart, a piece of yours,

Aren’t there enough of us make a bunch of filled hearts?

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We feel their hearts, but they don’t fill us back.

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You don’t feel like we would ever be together,

Why does it feel so much better with you?

When I’m now worse off than I started?

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A poison that’s traveled to my heart it’s,

Killing me.

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You willingly.

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Left me.

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Standing.

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Holding what was left of my heart in hand,

Just when I was starting to think you could understand,

Me.

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See how much I loved you?

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