I enjoyed YOU thoroughly

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(your comment makes me happy)

This poem is very eccentric and please don't take that as a bad thing. The lines move and sway. There's no set boundary or scheme and you can see the urgency as the words are pushed and pulled within the confines of the structure. These poems can be very hard hitting, but they can also feel chaotic or all over the place if not careful. But I feel poetry is like throwing all your thoughts and feeling onto a page at a moments notice. This poem hold weight and the theme and emotion fit together very nicely. I enjoyed it thoroughly.

I dig it, I like the sense of confliction that is shown about the day that has been woken up to. The day is beautiful but it's more complicated sometimes.

I wrote this on my phone after waking up from a "nightmare" about the moon or something moving to collide with the earth and I woke up mid panic within the dream so it was "too" relieving to wake up to a pristine sunny day and these (the beginning) were the lines that came to me. As I kept on reflecting the later ones came along too. I think the dream was some sort of subconscious manifestation of my belief that art should (primarily) serve to be so great than an event such as a collision of the Earth and moon wold be of little significance when compared with the love of the unnameable things that this hypothetical art would extol. So I reflected on that thought that my dream was a subconscious manifestation and made the line  "Well what is art but a reproach and defeat of such strife". The line that starts with "Again attacks" refers to the loss of relief and return to sad practical emotions that comes too quickly after a spiritual experience. What attacked me is the realization that 

For starters I rarely go for the first post I try to find ones with no love and no chances left but this instantly stood out to me, while I do not understand it very well I absolutely loved reading this. Everything just flows perfectly, gourd together seamlessly to me and kept me
Super interested the entire time. The only thing I would say is help me be able to understand it lol, I like this a lot 💕


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Tranquility shattered 

Heartbroken - what transgressed? Every horror I jailed -repressed-

Yet, I've awoken - all I know is I've awoken and the day is beautiful

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One of few which will ever be, like the many I never see...

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Again attacks - my mind and the sum of my life

This too is doomed as I were in slumber

Well what is art but a reproach and defeat of such strife

Plentiful are defeated works, dismally growing in number

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Again the mind encroaches upon my life and so does my life

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Nay, I've won for now - I say I've won 

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As triumphantly to leave the future broken - entropy lurks

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Yet -for only I- my works are each breath before a dream and haven't I awoken? Don't I know the day is beautiful?  

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A breath after waking