>You're in my veins, you're underneath my skin I try to cut you out and let you breath again I only stained my sheets... I only stained me...

This is so pretty. I can tell your heart was really in this, and it makes my own heart feel sad for how you felt writing this. I think this is what poetry is about. The beauty of expression, when we have so much in our heart and minds, we all need a way to cope ♡

>And my sickest confession is I miss you

I felt this. It's such a raw feeling to hate your own emotions, and I think you captured that here perfectly. You can feel the emotions and conflict coming from within, which is one of my favorite parts of poetry. Thanks for sharing

To be honest, I wanted the repetitive use of sleep to emphasize the constant reminder of the person in their dreams and how exhausting it was. But now that it's not 3 AM and I'm not exhausted, I don't like it that much. Thank you for your feedback.

the sentiment is definitely familiar to me, and I like the emotional nature of your writing,  it's very raw and vulnerable.  the utilization of sleep twice in the first line does rub me a bit the wrong way (not that it's something I've never been guilty of) try synonyms " can I find a moment of rest" or something along those lines (I'm sorry if this is too critical.).  I am also a bit stymied  by the use of elipses,  but that is likely just a me thing.


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No matter where I sleep you're always with me
If you're in my mind will you let me sleep?
I'm tired of the dreams...
I'm tired of sleep...

We patched it up and became friends back then
Now when we interacted you hate me again
I don't know who you are...
I don't know me again...

You're in my veins, you're underneath my skin
I try to cut you out and let you breath again
I only stained my sheets...
I only stained me...

And my sickest confession is I miss you
And I know that you never do
And I don't wanna feed you...
I don't wanna be you.. 

I miss it 
I wanna hate you
So damn bad
To feel you hurt like I do
I love you too much...


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Just Let Her Go Already