THANKS u/hargatay.  I  often  use  poetry  as  a  tool  to  unravel  and  interpret  snippets  of  thoughts  I  have.  Thanks  for your  interest  and  feedback.


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You have very good word play, but I think the thing this lacks is theme. The references of dancing, of nomads, of samurais, are all referencing the human condition and the struggle of meaning, but it lacks a core element to tie the notions together. Maybe if each passage was built around the subject it would be more impactful? 
Like the line “we dance a naked repertoire” would be more meaningful if it was a reference to a previous line or theme. 
All this is just my opinion, but you really do have great word play, I just think you need to refine the subject of your peice. The experience of dread that people face form Just existing is so broad it could take away from your most impactful lines as they feel disconnected by the broad spectrum of dread.

Just when you think “everything matters”

You close on your dream and it shatters

The surface is breached as you come up for air

And find your life is in tatters.

&amp;#x200B;

“Nothing matters” is your Samurai creed

You don’t sweat and you don’t bleed

You’re alive but not living 

A lost nomad with nothing achieved.

&amp;#x200B;

It’s a paradox of our humanity

That we find hard to break

Our dreamed experience of relativity

Is only kept for our sanity’s sake

&amp;#x200B;

We only exist in context

That makes us who we are

Remove the causes and circumstance

And we dance a naked repertoire

&amp;#x200B;

If nothing we do counts

Then all that counts is what we do

And as the evidence mounts

I will hold simultaneous, contradictory views.

&amp;#x200B;

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&amp;#x200B;

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Everything Matters.......Nothing Matters