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This is very relateable. Thank you for this OP. You have conveyed this very clearly.

To me it means that dreams can elicit such complex and powerful emotions that they are not often replicated in reality

The line I really resonated with is "Experience feelings that don't exist" Is that supposed to convey how feelings so complex they can't be conveyed with just single words or sentences ? Or just feelings yet unknown to the common folk, would love your thoughts on that.

For me, this is off a bit. The meter doesn't flow perfectly but I do like the theme. I'm not sure about rhyming on some lines and then not on others, but, I am no one anyways so, as a grain of diluted salt, take it for what it is.

This starts out one way and just sort of wanders off the path......I suppose.....

you could argue that is like a dream, disconnected sort of , routes crossing randomly.....

but that is pretty abstract... best not to rhyme unless you mean it and stick to it

This is definitely relatable, and conveyed well. I like the theme, the rhyme scheme too, and the wording on a few lines REALLY hit. it indirectly calls into question the transitory nature of dreams but also reality itself, and questions the distinction between the two which is cool and i love to see. 

My critiques would be that the rhyme scheme isn't always consistent, which is fine, it doesnt take away from the poem itself too much. it could also use just a few extra lines to either expound more upon the lines "Consider that maybe we are all prisoners" and "We don't think, we're just listeners" that way also the last question seems a bit less random. also moving the two lines above the last question right under "And live your best moments again" that way the last lines take a darker twist and then that last question hits. 

Id also personally switch 'Dreams' and 'Reality' in the lines "Dreams may be a fire" and "And reality is the shadow we all admire" since fire can have a negative 

Quiet is the night as I sleep

And dream of a reality that only I keep

Most say that dreams are purely fiction

A distraction from one’s daily affliction
 
But I think there is more to a dream’s mystique


You may travel to places you’ve never been

Spend some time with the world’s greatest men

Experience feelings that don’t often exist

Realize what it is that you most wish

And live your best moments over again


Consider that maybe we are all prisoners

We don’t think, we’re just listeners

Dreams may be a fire

And reality is the shadow we all admire

Are we ready for the truth of the world or are we just passive visitors?

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Thoughts of a tired person