I have never felt more represented by something in my whole life,thank you

Thank you! The flow I think works fine and if anything is a little more tangible I’m the format but if it was four words per line that would have given the poem a… rigidity(?) that I liked

I actually really enjoyed the formatting (as unintentional as it may have been) and after a reread it flows really nicely! I skimmed it and it didn't really make sense, but after a thorough read of it it commands your attention throughout! Great job

By format I just mean I wanted 4 words per line with each repetition of the A… D… H… D… making up one line. I think the paragraph works- especially when accounting for my grammatical decisions but it’s not quite the same aesthetic I think I wanted. Daesin is a philosophical term that is really dumb: it kind of means “presence” but ultimately is just a made up word used to determine the peculiar state of experience that is unique to humans. I’m glad you caught the vibe my friend though perhaps counter-revolutionary more faithfully describes it. Thank you!

Are you saying that you didn’t mean to format it this way, because it honestly works pretty well in my opinion. I don’t have ADHD so I wouldn’t really know for sure, but from what little I do know about it, the shape of this poem sort of gets to what it feels like to have the condition, don’t you think so? The limited attention span, the hyperactivity, and all of that. Anyway, I’m quite impressed by the fact that a lot of the lines sort of make sense. In fact, I’m getting a revolutionary vibe from the whole thing, like this is a call to arms against some corrupt bureaucracy or something like that. Well done! Btw, what is a “daesin”? Is that a typo?

Wow. I feel like you captured what goes on in my brain perfectly. Really well done.

I found that ADHD more describes the creative process than the subject matter. Thank you!

At first the poem was a bit difficult to understand, but after a reread-or-two I started to understand more.
I like the word choice — impressive in my opinion! 

Also, the fact that the poem is dedicated to ADHD yet manages to discuss other topics throughout - history, human nature, etc - contributes to the quality of the piece

I love the concept of this poem as it rhymes and follows the acronym. 

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Beautiful! 10/10.

This a brilliant idea and very well written. Nice work!

If you want to see my experience with ADHD in this piece don't look at the subject matter. Rather this was a creative exercise/outpour for the wandering soul. Give it a shot! The first few lines are always the hardest

Very creative way to look at adhd I've suffered a long time

Honestly, this one is a masterpiece. It covers the dreary side as well as the creative side of ADHD.

I appreciate your interpretation! Thank you for looking at it at taking it seriously and finding your own creation from it!

This must have taken quite a while to compile so, I must say, good job and a great read!

Lines 8-10 struck a chord with me. The organization and clever use of punctuation, all while fitting within the theme of A-D-H-D, is genius. It is a fitting commentary on the current state of our world. 

Not enough jobs, or perhaps, a lack of will to conform rather than seek greatness, could be considered one theoretical cause of the ADHD “pandemic”. Had they considered the possibility that most people would rather not waste their days (hours rather) slaving away at a cause that they either do not agree with, or do not care for. The old adage of “having a high work ethic” can nowadays be defined as “sucking up for a buck” nowadays. 

Nowadays, the world is so intertwined that a paradox has unfolded before us. Unrelenting force, meet immovable wall, and vice-versa. Everything is now so complicated that it deserves nothing less than complex contemplation and deconstruction; however, to complicate i

This is a cool experiment you did! Thanks for sharing.


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Attention
Deficit
Hyperactivity
Disorder.

Acting Defiantly Honors Destiny

And Depression Holds Death

Away. Down Here Does 

Anyone Dare Hold Daesin?

And Do Haggard Dogs 

Answer Dreary Howls Defiantly?

“Art Degrades! Heroes Define!

Aesthetics Destroy!”- History Decries

Against Dangerously Hypnotized Denizens.

Anger Does Hand Dangerous

Assholes Dour Handouts. Destitute 

Areas Dominated Harshly Despite 

Affluents Declaring Honest Design.

“Assassinate Democracy!” “Hang Deliberators!”

Aphasia Denigrates Honored Decisions 

Animated Despite History. Demons

Attack Declarations. Hypocrisy Drowns-

Anyone Dumb Hatefully Disregards

Advice Demonstrating Honest Doctrine.

Archive Discontent. Hope Departs?

Against Dastardly Hatred Defend!


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