Appreciate that, thank you <3  


I was hesitant to use repetition as well but felt like it would convey some emotions here

This was a beautiful read, thank you so much for sharing. I love how the repetition just works, I find that repetition in a poem can be very hit or miss but here it's definitely a hit! It feels gloomy yet soft and caring, very melancholic.

Thats so amazing to hear..  
Been trying to write this for two weeks but couldn't get it fully out and indeed writing it in a public place, i found myself tearing up, flushing & about ready to break down  
Expression is a beautiful, healing thing.  
I encourage you to express & share here if you feel comfortable <3

very soon as i started reading your poem i felt memories to be passing through me, i could feel lots of emotions being held back inside asking to be expressed, written out. i think it is quite beautiful and your lines reminds me of how it feels like to be looking for the first loved one in the others and how we become just like the person we loved. you did a great job


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The abyss you were laid into.. absolute beauty.

Good read, got the mood across very well. I thought your use of imagery was nice (abyss you were laid into, farewell hangs around me like a noose, stony reminder). I thought your word choice fit the mood of the poem and was coherent with itself as well.

I particularly like the line "farewell was a forced guest" it flows very nicely and has a nice bit of alliteration. I'm also always a huge fan of repetition of a main motif, so "he looks just like you" worked well and was especially powerful when it changed to "I look just like him."

The message is a bit ambiguous and open to interpretation which I like, but narrow enough to where each interpretation is at least similar in nature. Is it about a third person, is that who the "he" is? Or is the "he" a memory of a lost person stuck in your mind? Or is the speaker of the poem the "he" referencing themself in third person? Either way great.

The ending was also very powerful. It could be interpreted as literal suicide or as a passing of on

I love how somber this poem feels; nice and gritty in a way that is very smooth and pleasant. I was going to point out a line that I enjoyed- but heck, man, I enjoyed so many of the lines. Just a really great poem that feels oddly familiar tbh, I think it captures what goodbyes feel like.

this was honestly one of the best pieces ive seen on this subreddit today. i absolutely love the way this is worded; how lovely it conveys the message you were writing about. some of these lines are downright heartwrenching. this really invoked a lot of emotion in me. absolutely in love with this work

He looks just like you  
and today I said goodbye to you  


even though you detached from me,  
And first loves proved over-glorified  
He looks just like you  
and farewell was a forced guest

How did i say goodbye to you?  
The abyss you were laid into  
Made me think of how he looks just like you.

I don't think we will meet again,  
but your farewell hangs around me like a noose.  
A stony reminder of a dead and buried past  
That i still grieve in my present and future

I look just like him,  
Yet my farewell would be gratifying,  
Wonder when I can say goodbye to me?

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Feedback to two of the most relatable poems i have read on here; [Feedback 1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/xmjtqa/comment/ipp9gll/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3) &amp; [Feedback 2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/xmhlwh/comment/ipp9s2g/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3)

We look just like you