This is really cool poem although I do feel like it's missing something somehow it reminds me of Moby Dick maybe just because of the ship but also in the tone and something about the speaker reminds me of Ahab. But it is missing something and I don't think that thing is a whale I have to think on it more to figure out exactly what it is but it is there like a nagging itch

thanks for sharing your insight,  
‘quarter past nine’ signifies time that was life changing to me.  

this poem is written as a representation of how foreboding can see something happening from a mile away but yet how it still manages to hit as if one was blind.  
how sometimes we dont want to heal because the pain is the last link to what we’ve lost.  

its about the grief that one goes through after being in relationship and how traumatizing it is to see how quickly the relation was devalued.  
its how traumatized person doesnt trust others and/or avoids anyone, and how in order to prevent further harm and to protect themself they surround themselves with “walls” to never let anyone too close to dig up old wounds.

Some things I felt 

\- Overall you did capture the feeling of sinking and feeling confined and helpless to the adversary, which I think was the intention. 

\- I felt there wasn't a sense of progression between the stanzas. Like you could place them in any order and it wouldn't make a difference. That's not a problem, but IMO is a missed opportunity. 

\- Some bits I just didn't understand. What does quarter past nine signify? TBH I would love for you to talk more about the poem if you want to.


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seen the storm coming  
right before it did,  
couldnt turn back  
it sank the ship.  

as the memories sank  
as the deep despair hit,  
just taken all hits,  
just started to sink.  

the thoughts couldnt sink  
sinking me and the ship,  
slipping through mind  
without allowing to think.  

as clock is ticking  
it is quarter past nine.  
admitting the truth  
silence is all left by the side.  

theres no fear in alone,  
no looking for lost,  
just surrounding by walls  
from every side to the side  

as scared to lose  
all of the links  
from whats to be lost,  
from whats in the heart  

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