heard a whispered cry
cherub kisses, angel eyes
death becomes her way of life
brushing tangled hair of mine
look at me, you can’t decide
if you’d stay content with time
even though it wasn’t right
you always were my state of mind
*alexandria
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Posted Sep 29, 2022, 5:02 PM UTC
Wonderfully worded. Great poem.
I really like the rhythm you have going. The first and last lines are slightly different in terms of their syllables per line, but I think this makes them stand out. It helps sandwich the poem.
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thank you so much for your feedback! you broke down my work beautifully into every category i intended on! ❤️🩹