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Thank you a lot. This is one of my first times really posting something I've written so I really do appreciate the feedback. Also thanks for telling me about the new line thing, I tried fixing it before just by pressing enter more times, but it kept resetting for some reason.

If you put two spaces at the end of a line it makes a new line just in case you didn’t want the paragraph form. I really like the idea of being overwhelmed with the connectedness of the world, but also learning that it’s easier if you don’t try to control it. Or rather you shouldn’t only choose to see the world through your own lens and exclude the infinite others that exist. I appreciate the imagery throughout as well,  especially of the end where you challenge the reader to “unbox” the world. It was a lovely read!


Everything is connected, but nothing is as it seems
I look at something once, and now it's in my dreams
I know it's complicated, but you need to see the world 
All of the us together, make up one big mural
We live in infinite chaos, and infinite paradoxes
But if you can pick it apart, see it's place, and places
Then you can be infinite yourself, cause it's all related
Don't pick and choose the parts you want, let it all come
Unbox the world, and follow the beat of it's drum



https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/xt1vog/rotten/iqpluk0?utm_medium=android_app&amp;utm_source=share&amp;context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/xt6sft/extinguish/iqpm9go?utm_medium=android_app&amp;utm_source=share&amp;context=3

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