Heartening to say the least. May I ask is this based on your personal life/experience or did you get inspired by the poems you've mentioned? Whichever one, it hit home. Good job!


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I feel like I, and so many others can relate to this poem. We sometimes act differently in front of those we try to impress. Yet this can have severe consequences, such as those in this poem. I really enjoyed this.

This is so heartbreaking and relatable at the same time. I loved the story you told through this poem. My suggestion: the old adage of show don't tell. Tell us the specific situations and instances. Be specific both about situations and your feelings. Other than that, it gave me the same melancholy as Joaquin Phoenix's movie Her.

I crafted a mediator specifically for you and dressed him in anthropomorphic qualities. The hope was that you'd fall for him, and in turn, he'd share what he caught with me. 

For a while—it worked! You laughed at his jokes. You let him replicate your behavior. You listened to his concerns, knowing full well that he was lost. 

The two of you had so many good times together; it was infuriatingly heartwarming to watch. 

But there was just one problem. (One problem among many.) You fell for him—not me. So, when I finally revealed the beast behind what I thought was a man, you realized what I knew all along: that you didn't really love me.

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My Mediator