I really like the idea but I feel the poem is too short to explore the depth fully. I also feel the poem could use more concrete imagery as it's a bit abstract. Also try to make your poem more intuitive than purely cerebral. I loved the core idea of self love and acceptance though.

Though short, I can't help but relate to this poem about self-love and self-reflection. The idealisation of others is dangerous- the idealisation of self even more. We often get too caught up in chasing what we want to be and end up losing the things that others love us for. Therein lies the tragedy. Is what we wish to become more important than the things others love in us? That is what I gathered from this poem. Like the aforementioned comment, I feel like there is room for expansion mainly. This is a very deep topic that deserves more lines. However, the current status of it still accomplishes much with just four lines. I can only begin to imagine what inspired you to write this and only hope it comes from a good place of reflection that ultimately is not resistant to the fact that you matter.

I like the fact that you use the symbol of the mirror without directly referencing to it. To me it seems that this poem is trying to talk about self hatred issues but idk if that was the op's intention.

Hello! 

I love the way this poem starts. It feels as though I’ve stumbled upon an active conversation. I really like that vibe with poetry, when it feels as though it could easily be a conversational piece. 

I feel as though this poem could be longer and explore this idea of being resistant to the idea that one matters. Personally I have struggled with my own hatred of myself and I would love to read a longer poem about your idea of it and how you handle it.

I like it. I get it. I really get it. Literally had a talk with a friend about this last time. How it’s so easy for her to see my amazing, but I don’t. And vise versa. Maybe it’s normal. For some of us. To downplay ourselves. Could that be true?

Like this a lot. I think you could incorporate sight or seeing the false conception of yourself somewhere in there.

I appreciate and relate to this piece. I’d love to see it explored a bit more within the poem but I sometimes think simplicity or more minimalist writing can be more thought provoking as it requires the reader to interpret it more personally. I have a soft spot for the theme of not being able to appreciate ones own Beauty or value.


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And the piece of opaque reflection that you stare into through your soft, illuminated portals of light, turn them dim.

Because it tells only the lies in which you believe. 

But you are immune to the parts of you that are true. 

And the parts of you that others love.
Resistant to the idea that you matter.




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Reflection