Very clear cut in in words but it gives a very distinct visual of the farmer which I really enjoy.

While I understand what you mean with the length of the poem, potentially adding a couple more lines to drive home the suffering/plight of the farmer (before the lines regarding his fate/rolling of dice) might better create a fuller image of the actual life situation you're alluding to.


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Simple yet effective, I think the length is good for what you were going for. If you wanted to add more depth it could be longer as personally I would get more desriptive with how hard the farmer is working by showing not telling. Then highlight some of the unfair treatment theyre recieving more than just a roll of the dice, because it feels like you are assuming your audience understands the context.

A silhouette toils

Day and night.

Reaping crops 

With an iron scythe,

His body tight.

But as he lies

Beneath the sky,

A roll of dice

From someone high

Decides his life.

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In my country rn, farmers are going through tough times. I sympathized, and had an idea which led me to make this amateur piece. I could've made it longer, but I felt that adding on more would simply ruin the vibe I was going for. So I kept it at that. Thoughts?

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The farmer